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January 29, 2012
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we were all lost kings of the electric
highwire act, tripping like ghosts through boarded
windows and vacant lots that never held
any secret we wouldn’t tear apart

cables stretched over the place we used to live
drooping tightropes for worn-weary dancers
that pirouetted from house to house while
we just paced the streets of glass and concrete

our mothers worried on their rosaries
and poured their fears into party-line chats
father just poured another scotch and said
boys will be boys so let them have their fun

and us out in the night between the tracks
and the towers willing our years into
smoke and bottles and dolled up girls that just
laughed like juice joint sirens calling us home

:iconangeljunkie:
Assignment: write in iambic pentameter

I've spent most of the weekend beating my head against a wall over this one, and I'm still not entirely sure I got it right. In the end, I was just happy getting 10 syllables in each line. Started off using this prompt from Easy Street and then fell into just putting random words down so I can't say I'm entirely sure what it's actually about.

**Edit: I know what it's about now, but I'm not telling. Also, ~disrhythmic has done a reading of it for #Elocutionists which you can listen to here (strongly suggest you do).
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:icondisrhythmic:
:wave: Hi. :heart: I'm a reader for #Elocutionists and I read this out loud. I'd love to put it up on our blog ([link]), if that's alright with you. You can listen to my reading here: [link]

Let me know if you like it. <3 I loved reading it. :)
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~angeljunkie Nov 20, 2012  Student Writer
That's perfectly all right with me.

It was interesting hearing someone else read it. You had a slightly different rhythm than I've used when reading it out loud, but I liked the tone you brought to it, and the change in rhythm added a slightly different slant to it. It's neat seeing something in a different way. :)
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:icondisrhythmic:
It's posted! [link]

If you add that link to the description I can submit this to the #Elocutionists gallery. :heart:
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~angeljunkie Nov 20, 2012  Student Writer
It's added. Thanks for letting me know :)
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=LadyofGaerdon Feb 22, 2012  Professional Writer
:wave: Hi! You have been featured by The Favorites Project! Please :+fav: the article to spread the word! :)
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~angeljunkie Feb 22, 2012  Student Writer
Neat :)
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=LadyofGaerdon Feb 22, 2012  Professional Writer
:)
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:iconbrassteeth:
God I love this.
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~angeljunkie Feb 17, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks :)
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